Two Fronts Battle
On a cold, winter day Jed went on a monthly fishing trip.
Two weeks into the trip Jed started to steer his, large red boat
with fast racing stripes down the side, towards his net that he laid
out in that night. Sea Lady wouldn’t go the way he wanted.
“What the…?” Jed thought. It didn’t matter how much he tried it
wouldn’t go the way he wanted.
Two weeks into the trip Jed started to steer his, large red boat
with fast racing stripes down the side, towards his net that he laid
out in that night. Sea Lady wouldn’t go the way he wanted.
“What the…?” Jed thought. It didn’t matter how much he tried it
wouldn’t go the way he wanted.
Jed ran onto the titan deck,the salty spray wetting his bear-
like hair that was lashing in the harsh wind. Suddenly the boat
started to disappear through an invisible force field. Jed ran to the
front of the boat quickly. DONG! He hit his head on thin air. He fell over.
All he could see now was black.
like hair that was lashing in the harsh wind. Suddenly the boat
started to disappear through an invisible force field. Jed ran to the
front of the boat quickly. DONG! He hit his head on thin air. He fell over.
All he could see now was black.
When he woke up, he wasn’t in his Sea Lady any more, he was on the beach.
He opened his blue eyes that shone as bright as the sun shines through the
white clouds. Jed slowly stood up, his vision was blurred.
He opened his blue eyes that shone as bright as the sun shines through the
white clouds. Jed slowly stood up, his vision was blurred.
There was one massive tree above him and blades in front of him. The big
one was called Crusher. He was big and brave with his two hammer hands.
One side was flat and one side spiked like the tip of a spear. His head
was the shape of a tree stump with his shattered teeth. He was with
Slicer the small one. He had feet that were saw blades made of the finest
metal in the word and you could see your reflection. His long, razor blade
hands were made out of the same metal You would call him a slicing machine.
one was called Crusher. He was big and brave with his two hammer hands.
One side was flat and one side spiked like the tip of a spear. His head
was the shape of a tree stump with his shattered teeth. He was with
Slicer the small one. He had feet that were saw blades made of the finest
metal in the word and you could see your reflection. His long, razor blade
hands were made out of the same metal You would call him a slicing machine.
“Hi my name is Jed you mast be Crusher and Slicer.”
“Hi. Yes, my name is Crusher and this is Slicer but Slicer can't speak.”
OORRNN! OORRNN!
“Here we go,” said Crusher, “it has started. The Blue Sun flyers are getting
close. Jed, you will join us. Pick a weapon from the armory. Get a long range
weapon and a close range weapon. We let you into Basher’s Land because
you are the son of Jim. Jim sent you here to bring out the of best
dagger the only weapon that can kill the Blue Sun King. If you kill him
you can stop the army.”
close. Jed, you will join us. Pick a weapon from the armory. Get a long range
weapon and a close range weapon. We let you into Basher’s Land because
you are the son of Jim. Jim sent you here to bring out the of best
dagger the only weapon that can kill the Blue Sun King. If you kill him
you can stop the army.”
WWEERRNN! WWEERRNN!
“Now the under runners are coming!” cried Crusher.
“Is that bad?” whispered Jed.
“ It is good and bad. They will fight the Blue Sun flyers but that is
another army that will kill humans.”
another army that will kill humans.”
It was starting. The world could see big, black, faded spaceships
entering the atmosphere. The ground started shaking then... CRACK!
The under runners are here. They jumped out of the crevices in the
ground and the Blue Sun flyers were flying through the city's the Ander
runners see the Blue sun flyers the army are trying to help the
people Jed went to see Sergeant Dave he brought crasher with dark cloak
entering the atmosphere. The ground started shaking then... CRACK!
The under runners are here. They jumped out of the crevices in the
ground and the Blue Sun flyers were flying through the city's the Ander
runners see the Blue sun flyers the army are trying to help the
people Jed went to see Sergeant Dave he brought crasher with dark cloak
“Sergeant Dave” yaled Jed
“I don't have time to talk to you kid the word is ending”cried Sergeant Dave
“but I can stop it with the help of my frends the best bashers”.
Ok work with me wen we got in the banker crasher took of his cloak
“hi Sergeant Dave” no ripley Sergeant Dave gave the beast bashers the
tik to help. In less than ten minutes thay were here to rescue the humans
they took them to the nearest army camp where they sent them to
the closest army banker.
“hi Sergeant Dave” no ripley Sergeant Dave gave the beast bashers the
tik to help. In less than ten minutes thay were here to rescue the humans
they took them to the nearest army camp where they sent them to
the closest army banker.
After the rout of humans coming in slowed down we now that we had to
fight for our world so we made a plan for assassination of Brout the
king of the under runners but we have to think we can’t just kill Brout
because the blue sun flyers will haunt as dawn so wen we are down there
sergeant Dave needs to keep building the 2911 so we can get to Sara the
blue queen it's good that we are almost done building. We need to go we
can abseil down one of the cracks in the grand as they were abseiling
down some under runners were coming up but crasher took care of that
wen we got down I sow a ginormous tower we need to use the grapnel gun
to zipline down to the top of the tower. Crasher is staying bake to holed
the zipline it’s good that I learnt Slicer sidlagwigy we landed on the roof
we spotted Brout he was two story below Slicer sliced a hole in the
roof wen we got down there was no one there we went down no one
there we went down slowly we looked through the door he was there
. “Ko we need to stab him with this nith so you break thru the wall
and then run I will sneak up and get him” whispered Jed. 3 2 1 BOOM
Slicer jumped thru the wall OOWEE the nith went strat throw Brouts
bodyguard frowz if you touch them they will crack
fight for our world so we made a plan for assassination of Brout the
king of the under runners but we have to think we can’t just kill Brout
because the blue sun flyers will haunt as dawn so wen we are down there
sergeant Dave needs to keep building the 2911 so we can get to Sara the
blue queen it's good that we are almost done building. We need to go we
can abseil down one of the cracks in the grand as they were abseiling
down some under runners were coming up but crasher took care of that
wen we got down I sow a ginormous tower we need to use the grapnel gun
to zipline down to the top of the tower. Crasher is staying bake to holed
the zipline it’s good that I learnt Slicer sidlagwigy we landed on the roof
we spotted Brout he was two story below Slicer sliced a hole in the
roof wen we got down there was no one there we went down no one
there we went down slowly we looked through the door he was there
. “Ko we need to stab him with this nith so you break thru the wall
and then run I will sneak up and get him” whispered Jed. 3 2 1 BOOM
Slicer jumped thru the wall OOWEE the nith went strat throw Brouts
bodyguard frowz if you touch them they will crack
Wen we got back up there blue sun flyers were everywhere we got to the
2911 “sergeant Dave is it ready” arsked Jed “YIP”seid sergeant Dave
“ok let's go everyone” yaled Jed. 5 4 3 2 1 blastoff “this is the last stand
wen we get on the ship kill all the blue sun flyers that you see me, Crasher
and Slicer will make them run biy killing Sara the blue queen.
Ok lets go as we work out of the ship there were blue sun flyers all
around the ship “ko we need to jump out onto the roof and attack from
the top go go go” wesperd Jed we all jumped off in epic slow motion. When
we got to the brite shining light at the gate we now we just had to fight
and kill Sara lets go as we were fighting gloriously we sour Sara and
we went for it. Crusher and Slicer distracted Sara and I jumped
at Sara with the nith infrant BOOM a massive shock wave hit jed
back hundred meters as he slowly got up and Crusher and Slicer were
above me seeing if I was good “SARA IS DEAD” yaled Crusher and ten
years later the word is starting to recovered
2911 “sergeant Dave is it ready” arsked Jed “YIP”seid sergeant Dave
“ok let's go everyone” yaled Jed. 5 4 3 2 1 blastoff “this is the last stand
wen we get on the ship kill all the blue sun flyers that you see me, Crasher
and Slicer will make them run biy killing Sara the blue queen.
Ok lets go as we work out of the ship there were blue sun flyers all
around the ship “ko we need to jump out onto the roof and attack from
the top go go go” wesperd Jed we all jumped off in epic slow motion. When
we got to the brite shining light at the gate we now we just had to fight
and kill Sara lets go as we were fighting gloriously we sour Sara and
we went for it. Crusher and Slicer distracted Sara and I jumped
at Sara with the nith infrant BOOM a massive shock wave hit jed
back hundred meters as he slowly got up and Crusher and Slicer were
above me seeing if I was good “SARA IS DEAD” yaled Crusher and ten
years later the word is starting to recovered
WALT write a science fiction narrative text
Context: Space Topic
Audience: Our extended whanau, peers and an online readership
Purpose: To create a science fiction short story that hooks and holds the reader’s attention.
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Hi there again,
ReplyDeletemy name is Viva, and I am very hooked in to your mega large story! WOW! you really have outdne yourself!. I like how you've described the setting/place were the battle was held at. I don't think you have any problems in this story.
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