My Tanitwha-Writing

For  the past few week we have been practising using descriptive language in our writing. We have been trying to 'paint pictures with words .' We all got to invent  our own Taniwha.  We all drew our own Taniwha and then we had to describe what it looks like, what we do with our Taniwha and what our Taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had to  have a go at drawing our Taniwha.

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard - Taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here   - Sam

                                                                                            

Tuna

Have you seen a taniwha shivering through the water as fast as lightning? I have.

His name is Tuna. He has razor sharp teeth to catch his prey. His skin is as blue as the moana so he can camouflage. Tuna comes out when the moon sinks down on the moana.

Tuna can shoot a lightning kikorangi bolt out of his mouth. Tuna has amazing kākāriki patterns on his face and body. He has no wings . Tuna has kākāriki patterns and a  kikorangi fin on the back of his head. Tuna has dark blue lines on his back but not on his face and he has a purple tummy. He can fly with no wings. He jumps up and slithers through the sky and dives back into the water when he is ready. Me and Tuna go and play when the moon is out. We jump up and down meeting the guardian of the sky and sea. It’s fun. I like going to different places to do tricks in the air. I like watching Tuna when he's shooting his water balls through the air and hitting the targets on the mountain tops.

By Sam.

My friends Tuna.                                                                My Tuna.

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer: lincon

What I think you did well:  you did well at telling me about your one.

What I think you could improve on: you could work on putting onamaterpier.

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: on describing my Tuna and we did fan stage.

What I could improve on: I can pot some more onomatopoeias.